Good start — some suggestions for making this start even more striking:

• Break this sentence into two, right at the second “if” — the examples are different enough, such that this sentence doesn’t “flow” well to have them together in the same sentence
• Insert “what” before the “if” in both sentences, to improve grammar and enhance readability

Overall, very thought-provoking and the Musk name-drop definitely does a good job of making me want to read more!